A natural extension of Elbow's "Giving Movies of the
Mind" - Pointing and Summarizing - are the third and fourth
Elements of
Effective Feedback:
Element #3 of Effective Feedback
Posing 1 question for your Learner to consider
Tell your Learner what philosophical question
his/her writing generates for you. What does their completed assignment
make you wonder about on a larger level? (Here, we are not looking for
rhetorical questions, rather questions that spark your curiosity about
teaching and learning.) You might even start your question with the words "I
wonder..."
An example might be: "I wonder... How do children know
when they are learning?" or "I wonder...What is the balance between guiding
a student and letting him/her figure it out on their own?"
Element #4 of Effective Feedback
Offering 1 or 2 things for improvement
The reason we say to give your Learner one (maybe two)
things is this: If you highlight one thing for improvement, then, the
Learner can take that one thing, remember it, and incorporate it for the
future. In our experience, highlighting 3, 4, or more things to improve upon
can get overwhelming.
If there are more than 1 or 2 things that you think need
improvement in content, keep a written record for yourself of those things
that need work and as future assignments come in, check to see if those issues
come up again. Chances are that the issue will come up again and you'll have an
opportunity to address it at that time. Also, hopefully, you'll see that the
1 or 2 issues you highlighted for improvement have been taken care of.
Highlighting 1 or 2 issues keeps things manageable for the Learner.
For example, if your Learner stays general in his/her
descriptions when answering a question, your "1 idea for improvement"
might be:
"When you talk about your classroom, give me a specific
example to support your idea - to make your thought come alive for me," or you
might point to a specific part of the writing and say "You wrote in your
assignment, 'The children seemed curious.' What did that look like, feel
like, sound like, taste like, smell like? Filter your description through
the five senses."
Pointing to things that are effective in your
Learner's completed assignment is another way to guide him or her to give you
more of that kind of writing where it is lacking. For example, you could say:
"When you wrote that 'Najib's hands were shaking and his voice cracked when
he read his paper to the class,' I felt like I was right there with you. Do this
same kind of descriptive writing - filtering through the senses - when you
simply wrote, 'the children seemed curious.'"